你是操的很严重么？

论坛：江湖兵器作者：浪迹天涯发表时间：2009-10-02 12:42
since when u became so obsessed with licking ccp's balls?
 
-->因该是obsessed of. 区别是Obsessed with somebody, or obsessed of doing something.
 
proud of fucking what?
 
-->fucking proud of what? 要不意思变成了”操什么会自豪“，估计你的意思是”操你大爷有什么可以自豪的“，意思不太一样。
 
some millions of the country men can drive a cheap car to work and watch plasma TV at home? is that it?
 
--> delete "the"; country men不如Chinese直接，而且不政治正确；上百万人怎么开一辆车、看一个电视？应该成cars；TVs.
 
the price tag is that they have to eat toxic food breath filthy air drink stinky water every day?
 
-->breath是名词，因该是breathe；并列注意用逗号。
 
is that they have to pay back half of their life salaries to the banks for living in a shitty condo over 70 yrs?
 
-->pay back不对，直接用pay就行了；half不对，应该是a half；life savings更好。
 
is that they have to pay back the other half to the hospitals if a family gets cancer off poisonous food/air?
 
-->pay back不对，直接用pay就行了；应该是a family member；这里是虚拟语气，gets不对，用got；off不准确，用from。
 
is that they have to watch their only kid grow up fed with piles n' piles of shameless lies in the schools?
 
-->growing up; being fed；in the schools不对，这里不是特指，而是泛指上学，所以用in school。
 
even on republic's birthday they have to bend over get horsefucked by the goverments all over the cities?
 
-->加个the, on THE republic's birthday; 已经是过去时了，had to；governments为啥用复数？有几个政府？单数就行了。
 
proud of fucking what!
the true patriotism is driven by critical thinkings and dedicated conviction, not silly emotions or Hormones.
 
-->critical thinking不可数，不能用复数；emotion不可数，不能用复数。Hormones可能也不可数，我不确定。
 
how did you ever become an academic person? I feel for ur students. 
 
-->ever不准确，用on earth：how on earth did you become an academic person?
 
总评：排比用的不错，显得很有气势，值得一赞。语法、词法错误太多，像托福不到600分的水平。拼写错误很少，不知是不是用了spell check了，值得表扬。很多地方，有明显中式英语的感觉。用了很多缩写，不伦不类，不提倡。
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